In my peer asessment I have been told to be more aware of my use of language, due to the age of my target audience I think this is a suitable amount of explicit language but I will be careful to not go too over the top. I could also censor this to make it more suitable.
I have also been told to be careful about the way I phrase things, e.g 'jab at his ex-band'. This could be classed as slating so I need to phrase this in a nicer way.
I'll also be removing 'Schecter' this is a brand of guitar but this may be unclear to the reader as to what a 'Schecter' actually is.
I will also be adding a title and a lot more text to this article as I've been told it is too short.
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